Telescopic Text Sentence

In writing we have been learning about making are sentences better and using simple, Complex and compound sentences and using Adjectives, adverbs more descriptive Verbs.

My Memorable Moment

Memorable Moment

When I was three the most devastating thing happened to me… My sister was born on the same day as me!

I woke up on a very windy day, but I didn’t care because it was my birthday! I jumped out of bed excited and ready for the day but little did I know something was about to happen that will change my life forever.

I skipped into the living room and looked around happily. I didn’t see anyone. “Strange”, I thought. Then suddenly my loving parents came racing through the door. “You’re going to your cousin's house”, they told me. “But I don’t want to it’s my birthday”, I answered.

“Sorry but  you have no choice your Mother is having a baby”.

And that was the most devastating moment that had happened (just kidding it’s actually pretty cool).

Describing

Describing Molly Deck

Appearance:

• Golden, Frizzy Hair
• Hazel coloured eyes with long eyelashes
• Chocolate, slightly bushy eyebrows
• Blush lips

Personality:

• Kind and caring
• Fun to be around
• Always joking
• Lively, pleasant and Amusing
• Very Friendly and positive.
• Interesting

Molly is a very fun person and she is always there for you when you need. She is fun to be around and you never have a dull moment when your with her. I only just met her this year but I already know so much about Molly. She is silly and merry when you are around her. Molly is a good person to know and i’m and glad that i’m her class.

Telescopic Text

Telescopic Text

Simple:

I pat the puppy

Telescopic:

Lovingly I pat Jessie my small, cute poodle at the beautiful park. The park had bright green trees. I adored the park. I threw my excited, playful poodle a red, shiny ball. My poodle raced after the ball that had already rolled far away. My playful Pup bounded up to me knocking me over. I stumbled backwards. I came down with a thud on the cold, hard ground. 'Ouch that hurt' I thought. I saw Jessie run back to try and find the ball. Then suddenly Jessie, came racing up to me as I lay on the ground still shocked from the frightful fall.

My Visual Mihi

Sir Edmund Hillary

A Slice of Life - Swimming sports

Slice of Life - swimming sports

BANG!

That was the starter gun and everybody jumped in. The laughter and shouts echoed around me as I swam on. The feet of the person in front of me kicking like mad trying to get to the other side as fast as they can. Icy cold water splashes my face so I can barely see anything. Happiness suddenly hits me and a smile spreads across my face as paddle, kick and splash. Proud as we all hit the end and everybody helps people to get out of the pool. I wonder what would the other houses be thinking when we hit the end?